Can anyone read my Persuasive essay? CAN YOU TELL ME WHAT YOU THINK AND TELL ME WHAT ELSE I SHOULD ADD?
Before drinking a glass of alcohol have you ever told yourself that nothing can possibly go wrong with just one drink? Your answer is probably a yes. Alcohol is the number one drug of choice for teenagers. Most kids don’t realize how drinking of alcohol can affect them. 1 drink can lead to many others, and maybe even addiction. Alcohol has many affects to your life and body. For example, it can cause you to drink and drive, get diseases, and maybe even get in trouble with the law. The consequences may lead you to a disastrous future.
One of the consequences for drinking is drinking and driving, which can lead to a life threatening accident. Many teenagers and adults don’t keep track of how much alcohol they consume, or how long it will take to were off. Many people make regretful choices when they are drunk. Studies show that about one in five drivers under the age 21 reported driving under the influence of alcohol. Alcohol loosens your inhabitations; you will most likely start to see double, it causes a slur in your speech, and you lose your sense of distance. As a result, many people get in accidents because they cannot concentrate on the road and it gets hard for them to follow or even see the street lights. In addition, when you are driving drunk you are not only causing harm to yourself but others on the road as well.
Another consequence for drinking is the chance of getting a disease. Drinking alcohol is not only dangerous for the few hours that you are drunk but alcohol can do long term damage to your body. By drinking too much alcohol on a regular basis many people can get diseases that are easy to get but really hard to cure. For example, alcohol can have far-reaching effects on different parts of the brain, peripheral nerves, and muscles, with symptoms of memory loss, in coordination, seizures, weakness, and sensory deficits. Also, if an individual consumes too much alcohol, and the liver cannot break it down, that person will probably gets alcohol poisoning which many people die from. Becoming aware of the diseases that alcohol causes makes you think before you drink.
Drinking underage, and drinking and driving can get you in trouble with the law, and get you in trouble at home. In many cases most teenagers that get caught drinking and driving will most likely get a fine and maybe get their license taken away. You may also get an MIP (Minor in Possession) which is “Anyone who is under the age of 21 and drinks alcohol in America, with the exception of special circumstances, is violating the law of the state. If sufficient evidence is shown to a police officer that the minor has been drinking alcohol or is in possession of alcohol, an MIP may be issued to the minor”. Many people also have to; complete community service, and have to attend Alcohol Awareness Classes. Worst of all you may lose your parents trust, and that may cause some problems at home. Furthermore, your parents will probably stop trusting you, and they will probably not give you as much freedom as you had before. Also getting caught for drinking underage does not look good on an individual’s record and neither does drinking and driving.
I HAVENT WROTE MY CONSLUSION YET AND SORRY I COULNDT INDENT BUT YOU WILL PROBUBLY KNOW WHEN THE PARAGRAPH ENDS
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John C posted: 28 May at 8:27 am
A few spelling and gramatical errors. Pretty good, but I’m not really sure what you are trying to “persuade” me to do. Is it to not drink and drive? To not drink altogether? I’m not sure.
It’s a good essay though.